Reunion
I wanted to see you
and not look away
but you looked away first
You wrapped yourself
in a royal blue blanket
and laid on the floor
next to our mother
I wanted her to turn
and comfort you
but she was wrapped up too
You took your place
with no words spoken
becoming one of two
in a solemn reunion
Laying down your life
too soon to be taken
bound like cocoons
waiting for transformation
_____Colleen Redman / Poets United / Imaginary Gardens with Real Toads
December 18th, 2016 10:59 am
Hi Collen, the use cocooning here is an especially tender one – I found this piece affecting… for me, you write as a true poet should… With Best Wishes Scott
December 18th, 2016 12:24 pm
I feel the sadness expressed here…..and the transformation that didn’t happen.
December 18th, 2016 12:56 pm
What I sense most here is the possibilities that never happened, the sorrow so understated, but yet so very clear.
December 18th, 2016 1:51 pm
Those closing lines are especially powerful. Sad, the transformation that didnt come, as so often happens.
December 18th, 2016 2:20 pm
A sad and stillborn hope it would seem. There’s a sense of a sacrifice that happened, but it just wasn’t quite enough.
December 18th, 2016 5:00 pm
Whew, wonderful and very deep into my mind and soul.
December 18th, 2016 8:00 pm
Oh my. Touches me. The death of both my mother and too early, my sister. Maybe some day I could write about that, but not yet.
December 18th, 2016 9:12 pm
kaykuala
Laying down your life
too soon to be taken
bound like cocoons
waiting for transformation
Moving remarks sadly but tender. Transformation should be forthcoming, Colleen!
Hank
December 19th, 2016 12:45 am
What a heartbreaking poem this is, succinct, sad and and needing not words but only tears.
December 19th, 2016 3:50 am
I too feel the tender sadness here. A giving up of hope, and yet still the love.
December 19th, 2016 4:40 am
greatly moving in its sadness and love…
December 19th, 2016 7:11 am
Gosh that was moving…
December 19th, 2016 9:03 am
There is something comforting about the cocoon and the reunion – and yet so poignant and sad.. a poem written with so much feeling and tenderness
December 20th, 2016 9:22 pm
There is so much loss in this lines. And not just lost of something or someone, with whom we spent a lifetime… but the worst kind of loss–the one that leaves us with too much to say.
December 21st, 2016 2:14 am
Wonderful shot and lines.
December 21st, 2016 11:58 am
This blew me away – brilliant poem from title to final line.
December 21st, 2016 1:51 pm
Grief spills through this. We often wait for a transformation that never arrives.
December 21st, 2016 5:26 pm
[…] 9. I wanted to see you / and not look away / but you looked away first … read the rest of my poem “Reunion” HERE. […]
December 22nd, 2016 7:26 am
Poignant and powerful.