Eclipse
Moon empties
the sun’s hot plate
bite by bite
it swallows the light
Bit by bit
it moves like a ship
crossing the sun’s
waves of blaze
__________ Colleen Redman / Poets and Storytellers United
"A blog is to a writer what a canvas is to an artist." ~ Colleen Redman
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April 12th, 2024 12:14 am
Bite by bite / it swallows the light… that’s a lovely way of putting it…
April 12th, 2024 1:26 am
I’ll have to take your word for it. We didn’t see the eclipse here. Bur that sounds like a wonderful description of it, and gave me vivid mental images at least.
April 12th, 2024 1:44 am
Nice distorted echo, bite and bit.
We were 94% but it was cloudy and raining that day. Typical Houston spring weather.
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April 12th, 2024 4:15 am
Vicarious eclipse!
April 12th, 2024 9:07 am
It really did swallow the light leaving onlookers overjoyed and awed by this grand cosmic sight.
April 12th, 2024 12:36 pm
Has to be the most creative, delightful, lyrical poem about the Eclipse I’ve read!!! Brava and Cheers, Colleen.
April 12th, 2024 1:20 pm
Very evocative and interesting poem.
April 15th, 2024 6:31 pm
Bite by bite / it swallows the light… I agree with Rajani
April 16th, 2024 9:25 am
Bite by bite (love that) we saw it happen!! Even in the 90% range the temp. drop was dramatic and the shadows strange and eerie.